I'm not very happy with the hammerhead shark, maybe I'll improve it sometime in the future. But it does have all the fins I still wasn't happy with the final version, since it, for some reason looks worse than the draft. But I already folded it so many times with so many different versions wtihout getting anywhere.
Thank you for responding! How can I know if my models are good or bad and what needs improving without any comments? Also, when nobody says anything it feels like no one even cares to take a look at my work. I prefer it when people acknowledge my existence.
Since you demanded a reply, and I am not very good at doing the origami, I must say you are doing great. I thought you are a genius and I am awaiting more new designs!
I know exactly where you're coming from, angrydemon. Trust me.
Check out all the replies to my photos thread!
As for your work: You have potential. I'll comment on the shark.
The shark looks extremely forced. The tail is not long enough, and the tail fins aren't proportioned at all. The "neck" (between the fins and head) is way too thin. The pectoral fins come from too high up. The "hammer" should be more rectangular. You should add a lower jaw or something to make the head more solid. You did do a nice job at getting the shape of the body, and at making the pelvic, anal, and second dorsal fins.
Hope this advice helps. If I knew more about the crease pattern, I might be able to suggest how you could go about making these improvements, but until then, you're totally on your own!
A thing that i miss in nearly all your models (exept the kangoroo) is sharp folds. I know it is quite easy to "form" something out of a , maybe boxpleated, base. Your frog looks a bit squeezed too. Another point is that your folds seem to be a bit inacurate... All this criticism goes in the same direction as Visionary mentioned before.
It may sound a bit harsh, but it is really meant constructive. I think i did not post it before because it sound harsh and i do not want to offend you.
Maybe the frog would look better with some type of heavier paper, wet folded. If you don't want to miss the shaping/forming part (this may be a great expression of your own style) you should try to lock the paper curved with only a few folds. Remeber the wet folded work of la fosse, or the frog by david derudas. The wrinkles in your models make them look like they were "unfinished".
If i were you i would try to fold more acurate and try to avoid wrinkling the paper.
I was hoping the wrinkling would make the models look more realistic But the frog is extremely difficult to shape. I spent nearly an hour trying to get it perfect. It wasn't always so wrinkly...
I don't think heavy paper will work, because of the toes. I'll keep trying to perfect it. Thanks for your advise! Without you guys to prod me around I probably won't even do anything about it.
Something that has helped me improve my work is to look at others' work critically. If you look around on peoples' Flickrs, for instance, you will not only see photos of their work but comments from others about it. Notice what gets said about the models and look at it yourself to see where they are coming from and if you agree with what they said. Look at the models yourself, analyze them, and comment. This will carry over to your own models and you will become more aware of the flaws in them and what is not quite right. Again, this is what worked for me and it has certainly made a difference in my work.
I like the hammerhead as a first design, and I think you'd get some very precise comments if you took the time to make a careful, sharp drawing of the CP. I think that the expertise that I infer was offered, would help very much with your understanding of the principles of design. I work hard to do what I can when an expert offers to help me.
The frog has a nice look to it. The proportions need some work, and you might gain some insight by looking at some other designs to copy some of the shaping techniques.
Lookin' much better. The tail's a little long, and the neck is a little short. It looks like if you folded the front legs down more towards the back. The hind legs could also use some more meat.
Overall you've done a good job at getting the image of a giraffe, and with a pretty clean look. The little mane is nice, though you may want to make the sink at more of an angle, so that the neck isn't quite so rectangular.
About twenty years ago when I was a child the animals in the Vienna zoo really where imprisoned. They had very small cages enabling you to see the poor creatures very well. But today I wouldn't call them imprisoned anymore. Sure they are in a restricted area, but this area is really huge with many places to hide beautiful bushes and trees and flowers everywhere. Also there are much less animals per area and they are trying to combine animals that live together in nature too.
Seeing that some natural habitats aren't save for animals leading that some of them nowadays are only to be found in zoos and other protected zones I wouldn't demonize zoos.
Good Giraffe. I know you have limited budget, but I think this model is a little thicker, so thinner paper might work better. It looks like you used yellow copy paper. Maybe some gift wrapping paper, butcher paper, or some kami might work a bit neater.
I like the horns and ears. Lots of models leave those out.
Making the legs thinner should be easy to do with rabbit ears or folding in half.
For a quick fix, pleating the tail at the base might shorten it, but I suggest reducing the flap in the base design.
Good work .. I'm jealous of your growing skills. Let us know when you have the next versions of the frog, hammerhead, and giraffe.
Giraffe
Author: TJ Foo
Folder: TJ Foo
I folded it several times to perfect the folding sequence, so that I can fold it as cleanly as possible. Now my desk is covered with paper giraffes. I also fixed all the flaws that the first one had. I hope you guys like it, cause I'm NOT folding it again!
I still wasn't happy with the final version, since it, for some reason looks worse than the draft. But I already folded it so many times with so many different versions wtihout getting anywhere.
But the frog is extremely difficult to shape. I spent nearly an hour trying to get it perfect. It wasn't always so wrinkly...
